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rodrigo! Viva Los Latinos!! Quote \| Reply \| This message was updated on 10/2/2003 6:39:17 PM by rodrigo!	batman posted on: 10/1/2003 5:56:52 AM well i thought I should get around to posting this...so at least you guys can know what was going on in that page I posted. I have no idea how to write a comic, so I just went with instinct and wrote it....I hope it sounds decent. Anyways, here it is (I can't post the other pages until the art for them is up as well) Batman Page 1 Panel One: Establishing shot of the warehouse, with Batman perched high on the roof. He sits on the mini-clock tower part, above the roof. Caption- The moon sits high, baring its scarred face for all to see. Panel Two: Continuing from Panel 1, we see the sign “No Trespassing” all torn and wrecked. The fence is in a similar state, with parts cut and ends frayed. Caption- The night is still fresh, and for these two souls, the darkness commands them, welcomes them. Panel Three: We see Batman, still in the same perched position as Panel One, staring out ahead. He looks serious. His cape is being carried by the breeze and sways in front of him. It covers most of his body. The moon is in the background, hidden mostly behind the mechanical parts of the antenna tower. Caption- For this knight of the night, the veil of darkness brings a deep sense of comfort. Panel Four: Close-up of Batman, ¾ view. The moon is not shown here, yet we know where it is as there is a distinct light source in his face. Thought Caption: ‘ Looks like a typical hideout for a sicko like this. The stony walls won't protect his lost soul. ' Panel Five: Another shot of Batman, from beneath. The camera is zoomed out more here, so Batman is more of a shadow than a distinct figure. He still retains the same pose. Caption: The shadow, stirring in the night waits, awake, still waiting. It has become part of the night, part of the unseemly nightmares lurking under the sinister cloak of the night. Thought Caption: ‘Looks like there’s only one way to get in.’
Artsta MODERATOR with lead! And Nars trusted wingman! Quote \| Reply \|	batman replied on: 10/1/2003 11:10:15 PM heh, looks like you've got a darkside to ya huh latino? nice writing!!
rodrigo! Viva Los Latinos!! Quote \| Reply \|	batman replied on: 10/2/2003 1:57:12 AM thanks man
DAEMON Power House! Quote \| Reply \|	batman replied on: 10/2/2003 4:48:23 PM cool lat nice work a couple of suggestions the first caption although good and varied word usage was incorperated it took me a couple of reads to comprehend no biggie and the thought caption where he says it wont save him or whatever i think you should re-word that bit to go with the more poetic and moody feel your trying to acheive
rodrigo! Viva Los Latinos!! Quote \| Reply \|	batman replied on: 10/2/2003 6:36:45 PM thanks for the help hybrid. I agree that heroic thing he says there does go against the writing mood i set earlier. I'll change the first caption to make it easier to understand too.
dirty_c El Gigante Cabron De Tijuana! Quote \| Reply \|	batman replied on: 10/5/2003 2:17:45 AM Nice work, L. Not much to say really, cause I'm not aware of the higher plot, and everyone's gotta find his own voice. one suggestion, i guess. My favourite Batman is the Dark Knight Returns Batman. He says bugger all except for very direct, functional things. He's got a dry sense of humour, he's a powerful character when he's silent. Your words here don't break that idea at all. Just that if you made a bigger comic or whatever, I think the character lives best in the moments where he silently appears on a scene, not when he's thinking too much. He acts on instinct - will knock a guy down, then think something brief. You know "one". That sorta thing. The Bats is all about business. Nice job.
rodrigo! Viva Los Latinos!! Quote \| Reply \|	batman replied on: 10/5/2003 2:32:01 AM ahh I see, that would actually suit batman more in my story, but at the moment he's more of an inquisitive and he thinks a lot. I like that idea of a silent type guy, as I said it would fit in more, especially how I said he's like a shadow and stuff. thanks for the feedback

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