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Message: Emoticon Listing HTML Help	[quote]Hi everybody! chorus "Hi doctor Nick!" Some of you may know me from the Morrowind forums. I had posted a short story there and Unforgiven the Animated Fishystick asked me to take a look at these forums since they need input... The original story was written to poke fun at the Crash To Desktops. I'll include the original ending, just for the curious. Enjoy!! "Lysanna clenched her teeth. The Daedroth had been relatively quickly dispatched, but not before it had plunged its massive claw into her side. And now this: above her stood the Dremora Lord, grinning and lifting his axe to deliver a fatal blow to the young woman on the ground. Lysanna managed to roll to her side just in time to feel the displacement of air next to her ear when the axe came down. Its massive head struck sparks on the stone floor of the dungeon of Vas with a loud clang. Lysanna tried to get back on her feet, but the Dremora Lord grabbed her by the hair and she slipped on the black pool of her own blood. She landed hard on her backside, but she was so hard on adrenaline that she didn't even feel her tailbone break. Again the axe cleft the air, this time the Fiend swung it with one hand, the other holding a knotted tangle of her hair. It went straight for her neck. Lysanna grunted and pulled herself downward with all her might. She felt a ripping sensation in her scalp and the axe missed her head just barely. The Demon absently shook the strand of hair off his hand and regained his balance, giving Lysanna enough time to regain her footing. This time the demon went for her legs, slicing low. She tried to step outside the arc of the swing, but too late. Her right leg got out of the axe's reach, but her left leg was caught in the swipe of the massive cleaver and she felt her knee being crushed by the blow. She screamed and went to the ground again. Her Imperial greaves had saved her leg from being severed at the knee, but the pain was white-hot nevertheless. She could feel the jagged shards of bone grinding together as blackness crept out from the corners of her eyes and was driven back by pure adrenaline. Through all her pain, she realized she had managed to hold on to her sword. She grunted." You can continue from there if you wish. Now just for the sake of the story, I'll give you the original ending:... "The Dremora once again stood over her, eyes blazing with bloodlust. But before the axe could come down, Lysanna had swung her sword with all her might towards his shins. There was a dry snapping sound, and the Demon's left leg turned to jelly, sending him crashing to the ground next to Lysanna. Before the creature fully realized what was happening, Lysanna had gotten to her knees and plunged Icicle straight through his ribs, exploding the foul heart beneath. The Dremora gurgled, and was still. Lysanna collapsed on the stone floor, breathing hard, and the pain sent tears streaking down her cheeks. She raised her hands to cast a Mother's Kiss Spell, which would hopefully allow her to limp (or at least crawl) back to the nearest settlement. She saw the first shimmer of light on her hands, and it was the last thing she ever saw. In one terrible instant, she, the Dremora's body and the entire world were wiped away. All that existed ceased to be. Nothing was left of the world but a blue sky with a few white clouds. And with the mysterious runes 'Windows 2000' hanging in the air..." Enjoy mutilating my story! :D And tell me what you think while yer at it ;)[/quote]
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This message was updated on 1/27/2004 1:24:50 PM by Stormrider

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replied on: 4/3/2003 2:50:18 PM

Hi everybody! *chorus* "Hi doctor Nick!"

Some of you may know me from the Morrowind forums. I had posted a short story there and Unforgiven the Animated Fishystick asked me to take a look at these forums since they need input... The original story was written to poke fun at the Crash To Desktops. I'll include the original ending, just for the curious. Enjoy!!

"Lysanna clenched her teeth. The Daedroth had been relatively quickly dispatched, but not before it had plunged its massive claw into her side. And now this: above her stood the Dremora Lord, grinning and lifting his axe to deliver a fatal blow to the young woman on the ground. Lysanna managed to roll to her side just in time to feel the displacement of air next to her ear when the axe came down. Its massive head struck sparks on the stone floor of the dungeon of Vas with a loud clang.
Lysanna tried to get back on her feet, but the Dremora Lord grabbed her by the hair and she slipped on the black pool of her own blood. She landed hard on her backside, but she was so hard on adrenaline that she didn't even feel her tailbone break. Again the axe cleft the air, this time the Fiend swung it with one hand, the other holding a knotted tangle of her hair. It went straight for her neck. Lysanna grunted and pulled herself downward with all her might. She felt a ripping sensation in her scalp and the axe missed her head just barely.
The Demon absently shook the strand of hair off his hand and regained his balance, giving Lysanna enough time to regain her footing. This time the demon went for her legs, slicing low. She tried to step outside the arc of the swing, but too late. Her right leg got out of the axe's reach, but her left leg was caught in the swipe of the massive cleaver and she felt her knee being crushed by the blow. She screamed and went to the ground again. Her Imperial greaves had saved her leg from being severed at the knee, but the pain was white-hot nevertheless. She could feel the jagged shards of bone grinding together as blackness crept out from the corners of her eyes and was driven back by pure adrenaline. Through all her pain, she realized she had managed to hold on to her sword. She grunted."

You can continue from there if you wish. Now just for the sake of the story, I'll give you the original ending:...

"The Dremora once again stood over her, eyes blazing with bloodlust. But before the axe could come down, Lysanna had swung her sword with all her might towards his shins. There was a dry snapping sound, and the Demon's left leg turned to jelly, sending him crashing to the ground next to Lysanna. Before the creature fully realized what was happening, Lysanna had gotten to her knees and plunged Icicle straight through his ribs, exploding the foul heart beneath. The Dremora gurgled, and was still. Lysanna collapsed on the stone floor, breathing hard, and the pain sent tears streaking down her cheeks. She raised her hands to cast a Mother's Kiss Spell, which would hopefully allow her to limp (or at least crawl) back to the nearest settlement. She saw the first shimmer of light on her hands, and it was the last thing she ever saw. In one terrible instant, she, the Dremora's body and the entire world were wiped away. All that existed ceased to be. Nothing was left of the world but a blue sky with a few white clouds. And with the mysterious runes 'Windows 2000' hanging in the air..."

Enjoy mutilating my story!

And tell me what you think while yer at it

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